Thank you so much. I wanted Teddy to feel relatable, even in his darker moments. The exhaustion and emotional weight of raising little humans can be overwhelming at times. Thank you for reading and for sharing that. 😊
Oh very good building! I was getting concerned about halfway through that maybe something untoward had happened and you delivered without saying too much or spelling it out too bluntly. Loved it!
Thank you! I was worried about the pacing halfway through, so it’s such a relief to hear that it landed. It was a tricky balance to strike between mental breakdown and supernatural horror. I’m glad the restraint worked out. I really appreciate you saying that!! 😊
I’m glad you felt that! I wanted to leave a little space for the reader to decide what they think happened. Like an odd itch in the back of your mind. Part 2 is definitely tempting, but I already have two serials I’m trying to finish. Still… you never know. Maybe another character meeting their demons in "therapy" could make a good spinoff. 😉
I have to give it to you… I was scared to keep reading. I didn’t know what was going to happen but I knew it wasn’t going to be good. You wrote this perfectly!!
Hi Skyla, that might be my favorite kind of compliment! That means I hit my mark. Thank you so much for saying that. I really appreciate you reading my story! 😊
Hi Nathan, thank you so much. I’m glad the restraint and slow build landed the way I hoped. I tend to lean maximalist, so I really appreciate you noticing that the quieter approach worked. 😊
"Daddy, stop" arriving between the giggles and the moans is where this turns from good to genuinely unsettling. You trust implication over explanation, which is rare in flash horror. The therapy frame earns its keep. Congratulations!
Thank you for noticing. I debated pushing it further, but I’m glad I trusted the restraint instead of the darkness. I truly appreciate you reading so closely and leaving such a thoughtful comment!
Truly got behind my skin, scary!
That's great! That's exactly what I was going for. Thank you so much for reading my story!. 😊
a very well written chilling story. I somewhat can relate to Teddy in regards to his relationship with his wife
Thank you so much. I wanted Teddy to feel relatable, even in his darker moments. The exhaustion and emotional weight of raising little humans can be overwhelming at times. Thank you for reading and for sharing that. 😊
you are welcome, I think most important thing in writing a good story is writing a charcter(s) that resonate withy the reader. Excellent job.
Oh very good building! I was getting concerned about halfway through that maybe something untoward had happened and you delivered without saying too much or spelling it out too bluntly. Loved it!
Thank you! I was worried about the pacing halfway through, so it’s such a relief to hear that it landed. It was a tricky balance to strike between mental breakdown and supernatural horror. I’m glad the restraint worked out. I really appreciate you saying that!! 😊
It really works here — well done!
It's sooo awesome like seriously...but in the end feels like there is something missing....ahm maybe we need part 2 😭 make a series
I’m glad you felt that! I wanted to leave a little space for the reader to decide what they think happened. Like an odd itch in the back of your mind. Part 2 is definitely tempting, but I already have two serials I’m trying to finish. Still… you never know. Maybe another character meeting their demons in "therapy" could make a good spinoff. 😉
I have to give it to you… I was scared to keep reading. I didn’t know what was going to happen but I knew it wasn’t going to be good. You wrote this perfectly!!
Hi Skyla, that might be my favorite kind of compliment! That means I hit my mark. Thank you so much for saying that. I really appreciate you reading my story! 😊
I love the restraint here. A slow swirl. Very measured. Very well done.
Hi Nathan, thank you so much. I’m glad the restraint and slow build landed the way I hoped. I tend to lean maximalist, so I really appreciate you noticing that the quieter approach worked. 😊
"Daddy, stop" arriving between the giggles and the moans is where this turns from good to genuinely unsettling. You trust implication over explanation, which is rare in flash horror. The therapy frame earns its keep. Congratulations!
Thank you for noticing. I debated pushing it further, but I’m glad I trusted the restraint instead of the darkness. I truly appreciate you reading so closely and leaving such a thoughtful comment!
Beautiful ending Roxi, great story!
Hi Night Bites! Thank you so much. I'm glad you enjoyed it! 😊
Dave, you can call me Dave.
Ah, okay. Hello Dave! 😊
Bonsoir Roxi!
Really great read! I had a similar open closet door situation as a kid, and this took me there...Thanks for the story!